It is important for children to learn what is right and what is wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the distinction. To what extent do you agree? What sort of punsihment should be given?

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral education
  • decision-making
  • appropriate punishment
  • reinforce
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • harsh punishment
  • emotional damage
  • positive reinforcement
  • fair and measured punishments
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