In many ciuntries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extend do you agree?

Recently, there have been arguments that
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more demerits than
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to co-educational
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in several countries. I partially agree with
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because of two reasons.
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to go to single-sex
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the child who has some disadvantages when relate
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girls due to traumatized or something. In
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, children are possible to
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more about study because there are no relationships with other genders. From
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kinds of reasons there
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getting experiences of co-educational will
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an adult.
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, when we became an adult, we join
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to do work at that time. It will increase some
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opportunities
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opportunities
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, commonly. In
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used to relating with
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is better advantages for working for
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better relationships among a company. For
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merits as well to
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to co-educational
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. In
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, some people believe that in terms of going to single-sex
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some disadvantages than go to co-educational
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though, it is
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by parents.
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but, there are so many advantages to
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to co-educational
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as I said.
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