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In many ciuntries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extend do you agree?

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Recently, there have been arguments that going to single-sex
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 brings more demerits than going to co-educational
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 which is in the parent's hands to decide which choose in several countries. I partially agree with
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 statement because of two reasons.
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, there are so many reasons why parents decide to go to single-sex
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 for children
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 some disadvantages when relate to girls due to traumatized or something. In
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 case, it is difficult to go to a co-educational school by the child.
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, children are possible to concentrate more about study because there are no relationships with other genders. From
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, getting experiences of co-educational will affects becoming an adult.
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, generally, when we became an adult, we join a company to do work at that time. It will increase some opportunities to relate with women, commonly. In
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 case, the person who gets used to relating with the woman is better advantageous for working in negotiations and, keeping better relationships among a company. For
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 reason, there are merits as well to going to co-educational
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. In conclusion, some people believe that in terms of going to single-sex
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 brings some disadvantages than go to co-educational
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 though, it is possible to decide by parents.
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, it depends on the child's situation but, there are so many advantages to going to co-educational
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 as I said.
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