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Overpopulation is the world’s most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The majority of
people
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 consider
overpopulation
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 the world’s most crucial issue. Personally, I agree with
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 opinion and I believe that the problem of
overpopulation
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 is very serious.
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 essay will provide arguments supporting
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 point of view. The question of
overpopulation
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 is critical because it leads to other serious problems, the most important one of which is pollution.
People
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 tend to use less efficient methods while extracting natural
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,
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 causing pollution. One prime example is oil spills, the biggest one of which happened in 2008, in an oil extraction platform “Deepwater Horizon”, that has polluted considerable areas of water
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 and killed aquatic fauna.
People
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 are forced to use more natural
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 as a direct result of
overpopulation
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 since the more
people
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 live on Earth, the more
resources
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 are required to sustain those lives. Another reason why
overpopulation
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 is a serious issue is the lack of food to support humanity. Agriculture uses a considerable amount of land as farming land to obtain food and requires lots of other
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.
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 can be dangerous for the environment since
people
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 cut down forests and convert them into farming grounds to employ for farming purposes which destroys local ecosystems.
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, in Brazil, the rainforests of the Amazon are being cut down to be converted to farms and a unique ecosystem is under threat of destruction. Another example of a destroyed ecosystem is the Aral Sea, which has been lost due to the drought
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 of a project conducted by the USSR to divert the waters of Syrdaria and Amudarya, the rivers that used to feed the Aral Sea, to support local farming. Agricultural development, if left unchecked, can easily prove to be a problem for the environment. To conclude,
overpopulation
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 is indeed a serious ecological issue that has to be addressed urgently.
People
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 are in need of food and
resources
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, but agricultural activities or the extraction of natural
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 may damage the environment. If
people
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 will fail to take control of their actions, the planet Earth may be damaged beyond repair.
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