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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some humans are thinking that admitting
things
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 which we don’t like are better for our
life
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. Other ones argue that
people
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fight
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 for
change
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 ,unlike
things
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 .I personally agree with the
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 opinion that
people
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fight
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 for changing the bad or unlike
subjects
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 in their
life
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. On one hand, some natives think that admitting poor quality places of activity is good doing . They believe that admitting some unlike
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 in
life
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 is easier than trying to
change
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 them. If
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, they are having more calm in themselves,
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 they can more enjoy their
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,
people
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 who admit their all of the situations in
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work
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change
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 and they are having enough time ,
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 ,with their family.they can going park and have fun moments.
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, some humans argue that
people
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work
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change
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 unlike
subjects
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 to good places of activity. They think that
people
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 should not admit any unlike
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 and
people
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fight
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 to
change
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 them.it has some reasons.
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,
people
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 should not admit any unlike situations because it is to cause depression and health of humans’ mental being illness .
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,
people
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 aren’t satisfied with their
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, if they are not changing their
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 ,they are doing unlike duties every day and it is a cause depression in future.
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, when
people
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 try for an aim they are experiencing a good feeling and it is positive for their own.
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, a predominant adjective of humanity is that they want the best of anything so they can not admit unlike
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 easily. In conclusion, we find that some humans are thinking that it is better that
people
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 are admitting unlike places of activity and others argue that
people
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 should
fight
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 to
change
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 unlike
subjects
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 and they should not admit any ,unlike
things
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.I agree with the
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 opinion that
people
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fight
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 for their
life
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 and
work
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change
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 any ,unlike
things
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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