Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Before entering

university

studies, many young people start to work or travel for a

year

after they finish high school.

This

essay will suggest the advantages

such

as we can gain many experiences and money saved but delaying careers and reducing motivation to study are the disadvantages. The main advantages of a

year

break before attending

university

are that

students

can learn about the world and earn money for future use.

By working

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or travelling for a

year

will allow

students

to learn about the difficulties of life outside of the education system.

Also

, the fees of

university

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are high, and a lot of

students

decided to work and save for their

further

study

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studies

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.

For example

, one of my sisters took a break before entering

university

. She gained many experiences and learned about different people and personalities.

Thus

, she can work in big companies after finishing

university

. Despite these advantages,

students

lose a

year

that could have been used to improve their future careers. Some get used to working or travelling and they lose motivation to study, and they don’t want to attend

university

anymore. As job markets are competitive,

for

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those who finished

university

and

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didn’t have huge differences in opportunities. There will be

less

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opportunities for those who took a

year

off.

For instance

, according to a recent survey by the British Government, 26% of

students

who take a gap

year

never enter

university

. In conclusion, taking a

year

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break from studies can gain experience and save money but they should consider not

to delay

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delaying

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their careers and not

to lose

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losing

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motivation.