People watch foreign films much more than locally produced films. Why? Should government fund local film industries?
True foreign
films
are watched much more than local
produced Replace the word
locally
film
. I think the reason Fix the agreement mistake
films
this
is local Change preposition
for this
films
are don't interesting a lot of people
, therefore
they prefer foreign films
. Firstly
, local films
are very a
low-budget Correct article usage
apply
films
and they have poor quality. In addition
, in my country
local Add a comma
,country
films
are prefer
only by older Change the verb form
are preferred
people
because they are interested and for them, this
is a valid perspective. In my view, foreign films
are more interesting young
Change preposition
for young
people
, and the reason this
is that many young people
watched foreign films
because they want to know more the
language and for Change preposition
about the
them
it is Add a comma
,them
understandable
, than local Correct quantifier usage
more understandable
films
.
In conclusion, i
believe that local Change the capitalization
I
films
will also
have raise in quality, but also
they can compete with foreign films
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
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Linking word examples:
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
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- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite