People watch foreign films much more than locally produced films. Why? Should government fund local film industries?

True foreign
films
are watched much more than
local
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produced
film
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films
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. I think the reason
this
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is local
films
are don't interesting a lot of
people
,
therefore
they prefer foreign
films
.
Firstly
, local
films
are very
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low-budget
films
and they have poor quality.
In addition
, in my
country
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local
films
are prefer
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only by older
people
because they are interested and for them,
this
is a valid perspective. In my view, foreign
films
are more interesting
young
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for young
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people
, and the reason
this
is that many young
people
watched foreign
films
because they want to know more
the
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language and for
them
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it is
understandable
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, than local
films
. In conclusion,
i
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believe that local
films
will
also
have raise in quality, but
also
they can compete with foreign
films
.
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