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Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern life,
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 has become an integral part of individuals' life and some
people
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 believe that
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technology
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 is
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 of the main factors that lead to a decrease in human
creativity
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. In my opinion, if
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 is used for its purpose, it can be beneficial for mankind.
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 hand, according to some, the growth of
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 positively impacts
creativity
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 since it makes it easier for
people
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 to obtain any kind of data through the internet.
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 to
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, there are several sources are available on the internet where individuals can learn how to boost their thinking abilities and improve their knowledge.
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, the website called Creative Thinking has been found
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 of the favourable websites by many
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 who were facing challenges about
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.
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, nowadays majority of humans utilize social media to find new information or idea,
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, the significant usage of
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 has made many
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 to be addicted to it,
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technology
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 might be limiting creative growth.
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, social media is
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 of the biggest sources of new ideas and is freely accessible to everybody, it
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 gives you an opportunity to find anything quickly,
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 nowadays majority of individuals prefer to use the internet as it requires less effort to find out something new rather than using their own brains. To conclude, having everything mentioned I can come to the conclusion that,
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 might give us numerous advantages within a short period of time and less effort,
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 it has
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 some negative impacts on humans'
creativity
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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