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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. if these ar not taught, many are at risk of dying out in your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relavent examples ofrom your own knowledge or experience

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Learning a foreign
language
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 as
English
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 at school is often seen as important more than studying local
languages
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. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In my opinion, the
English
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language
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 has become a global
language
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,
therefore
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 studying
English
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 is more important rather than learning local
languages
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, but we have to give some priority to the local
languages
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also
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 in some manner. Giving an opportunity to learn
English
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 to our pupils at the school get advantages over teaching the local accent. As an example, with
English
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Education
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, students get knowledge about foreign
languages
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 and cultures, and
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 it is helping to enhance and share their knowledge with international students. I believe that
this
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 is the best way to bring innovative ideas and technology to the
country
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. Students who live in the countryside, don’t get a chance to touch the new globalized world without
English
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 knowledge.
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, giving the opportunity to learn
English
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 to all children who live in every corner of the
country
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 is a responsibility of the government and the ministry of
education
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.
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, we can discuss a lot of advantages that we can have, because of
English
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. Winning the international economy is the best advantage of
English
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education
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, who has a good ability to use the
English
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language
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, an easy to find a job in the international market, and bring foreign exchange to the
country
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, and I thoroughly believe that we cannot take our culture things and behaviours to international without
English
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.
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, there will be no more tourist industry in the
country
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 without
English
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 and communication skills in
English
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. Some people argue that learning a foreign
language
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 is a threat to the local accents, and its effect on the
country
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’s culture and historical heritage, because when people go away from their native
language
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,
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 they ignore their cultural behaviours and become demolish local society,
therefore
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 we have to teach the
English
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language
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 with under the guidance of experts, and with the help of government bodies.
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, others think that People do not hesitate to emigrate to other countries, because of
English
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education
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,
secondly
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, they settle in a foreign
country
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 with their family,
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, the local
country
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 does not benefit from the result of
English
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education
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.
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