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Write two body paragraphs to answer the following question and finish your writing at the end of the class. In some countries, the use of public transport is not favored by commuters. What are some possible effects of this situation and solutions to it?

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Nowadays, many
people
 often go to work by public
transport
 in some countries. In my opinion, there are several effects of
this
 situation and they should be solved by some solutions as below. Studies show that public
transport
 has many positive effects on society and
two
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the two
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 least effective are less congestion and more
development
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developed
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 infrastructure than others.
Firstly
,
people
 use public
transport
 in their daily activities so there is not much private
transport
 on the road. And
this
 is an important reason to reduce traffic jams.
For example
, When many
people
 go to work by bus or subway. And They no need to use their vehicle, especially not in the peak time .
As a result
, there are
less
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fewer
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 vehicles than
the
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in the
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 others where there are traffic jams.
On the other hand
, public transportation will prevent the
development
 of private vehicles. We should balance the
development
 of both public and private
transport
.
Secondly
, The country with
people
 uses public
transport
more
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development
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developed
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 infrastructure than the other country.
This
 is because they need to build many roads, subways, and railways. It is the big reason to make infrastructure develop fastly.
For instance
, Almost Singaporean use the subway as their main vehicle to go to work and shopping. So the government has to build many new subways. To make Singapore the most modern country in the world. And their subway system can bring
people
 to all the important places in Singapore. In conclusion, We should know and develop the benefits of public
transport
 with reasonable solutions.
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