You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter, •describe the event •mention what arrangements have already been made •say how your friend can help

Dear Harsh, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
letter to let you know that I am planning an event on obesity to provide information to the public on how to stay fit. I am a member of the volunteer club of Brampton and it is my dream to aware people of various current health problems.
, I will organize a program on 19th November.
, I already booked the banquet hall in the countryside where we organize an event and I
booked the health practitioners for providing the lecture to give knowledge to children about nutritional food. Most of the youngsters suffer from obesity because of fast food and unhealthy lifestyles.
, I
arranged the playground where outdoor games will be played by comers to make the event more entertaining.
In addition
, I tell you that most of the things are done but I invite you to visit my place one day earlier for the occasion as I know you are excellent at decorating. So, I need your help to make the stage attractive and
to cook delicious food for the guests.
, it is a good way to spend quality time together. I am waiting for you see you soon. Best regards, LS
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coherence cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and avoid mixing different points within the same paragraph. This will help with the clarity and logical structure of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Although the greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, the placement of information could be more logically ordered for better coherence and cohesion throughout the text.
task achievement
While you have addressed the main points of the task, more detail could be provided to fully elaborate on each point, ensuring a complete response to all aspects of the prompt.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is reasonably formal and polite, which is suitable for writing to a friend asking for help. Continue to maintain this tone throughout the letter for consistency.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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