Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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film on digital devices
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is unnecessary and watching movies could be done on smart devices.
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and it is not different where they do. Another idea is that
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It is indeed considered that people who love
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they believe to do so is
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entertainment
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due to they absolutely love watching
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a movie
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these years, pupils are not getting rid of the
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and unexpected enjoying which could not be experienced anywhere.
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cinema
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by anything because it is part of humanity’s history.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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