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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

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It is an undeniable fact that every
country
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 requires a strong economy to cater needs of residents and tourism is one way to bring more foreign currencies to the home
country
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.
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 essay put light on what are the pros and cons of a majority of tourists visiting
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 places. On the one hand, a number of advantages can be seen
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 as a surge in the development of the
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 is because a huge number of visitors coming abroad not only spending their international currency for enjoying the local activities of the place but
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 they are paying taxes on public transport they are using .
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, if they go to the waterparks, they are paying goods and services tax higher than the local residents and there are no membership facilities available for foreigners which are enforcing them to pay
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extra money and the revenue of the local government is increasing.
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, there are
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 a lot of drawbacks which can not be ignored.
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, people who are coming from other
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 usually do not read the rules and regulations of visited nations,
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,
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 leads to littering the many
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 attractions.
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, driving rules are not similar in every
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,
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, in
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North part of America
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 right side of the road whereas in Asian
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 drive cars on the left side of the road, which is increasing the risk of accidents.
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, in many western
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 accidents are rising day by day. In conclusion,
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 various
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 attractions bring people from many different
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 which helps the
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 to start new projects, visitors always have a lack of knowledge about the
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 they are visiting which causes the accidents on road and makes the
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 places messy.
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