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Many people today find they have insufficient time to spend with their families, because of pressures of work. What problems does this create for individuals and their families? What solutions can you propose? Which would be the most effective solution, in your view?

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 schedules and the shortage of family
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 issue is becoming a pervasive concern in many nations.
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 problem leads to numerous negative effects.
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 as losing strong family bonds between family members and
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 with
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's education and offer the best solutions to tackle
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 difficult situation.
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 with, the shortage of quality family
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 brings to society tremendous difficulties. One of the major
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 individuals face due to the fact is losing strong family bonds within their families. After a long 12 or 14 hours workday,
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, people would not have the energy and power to interact with their
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 or spouses to share their feelings and strengthen the bonds, which eventually will cause detachment between close people and even might finish in a family failure.
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 with
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's education,
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 with
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. Spending
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 with a family,
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, should be one of the main priorities for everyone. In my view, restriction of
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time
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 by the government,
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, may be a key solution to resolve the problem. If companies' management is forced to allow their workers to have more leisure
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, it will cause the prosperity of families. Another of
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-life family activities. In Austria,
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, companies organize days when workers'
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 visit their parents' workplace, because of which the young generation can learn what
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 their parents do at
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 and become closer to them. In conclusion, the modern lifestyle put on most society members the burden of heavy
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 schedules and lack of family
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.
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 a phenomenon undoubtedly will cause issues with losing close relationships with family members and educational
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 of
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, and suggested, according to me, the best solutions to ease the problem like involving family activities into daily
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 life by companies' management and restriction of worktime by the government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Flexible working hours**: Work schedules that allow employees to vary their arrival and departure times.
  • 2. **Remote working**: Working from a location other than the traditional office, usually from home.
  • 3. **Work-life balance**: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • 4. **Mental health**: A person’s condition with regard to their psychological and emotional well-being.
  • 5. **Paid family leave**: Time off work with pay granted to employees to take care of family members.
  • 6. **Time management**: The process of planning and exercising conscious control of time spent on specific activities.
  • 7. **Prioritize**: To arrange or deal with in order of importance.
  • 8. **Guilt**: A feeling of having done wrong or failed in an obligation.
  • 9. **Neglected**: Suffering a lack of proper care.
  • 10. **Behavioral issues**: Actions and mannerisms exhibited by individuals, often resulting from stress or emotional instability.
  • 11. **Support systems**: Networks of people who provide an individual with practical or emotional support.
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