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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter after seeing the advertisement in a newspaper. I can help you to teach language to your children .
Firstly
 , I go through the basics of the language lessons so that they can catch them easily. Without any idea of the origin of , the language it may be difficult for them to understand. So, it is a suitable job offer for me because I can teach them very enthusiastic level.
Secondly
, the main priority is that make them to knowing the letters and take the class from the basic tip itself. So that they can easily catch the words linking and start to communicate with family as soon as possible. I am giving promise that they will study these courses within two months. I need
this
 job urgently because my family conditions are not good . My sister wants emergency surgery so I want to make money for the progress of my sister's life. I would be most grateful if you could give me
this
 job to me. I very much hope that you will give me
this
 opportunity for me. Thanking you. Yours Faithfully, Megna
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