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Global warming is emerging as a great threat to human survival in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and suggest some solutions?

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Several problems are associated with global warming's development which
is
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increased
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sea
 levels continuously, but there are methods whereby they can be solved.
Thus
tendency
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 of dumping
of
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industrial wastes into
the
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nearby
water
 bodies
are
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 the main problem, but
fortunately
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 there are ways to address these issues. One major problem concerning industrial products
are
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 the ease with which
sea
,
ocean
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and ocean
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 can access potentially dangerous.
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, plastic is easily capable to impact
to
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them because of
their
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 harmful,
besides
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poison
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 ingredients. In
this
 case, it provides negative effects
for
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healthy
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the healthy
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 of
sea
 animals and especially
water
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the water
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body
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bodies
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. Another issue of concern is extreme warming over the world. In
the
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view of the fact that
,
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 the ozone layer is being depleted while disturbing the ecological balance.
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, these days, the ice, even the widest chilling in the world what is called
iceberg
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 is approximately melting. To counteract
these problem
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this problem
these problems
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, one possible solution would be for individuals to protect bodies of
water
such
 as
river
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rivers
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,
sea
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,
moreover
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ocean
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oceans
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 from pollution by industrial
ctops
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crops
stops
 as follows plastic.
This
 can be done through a preference for manufacturing and utilizing paper products like paper
bottle
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bottles
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instead
 of
another
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 solid and never non-melting productions
as
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 plastic.
In addition
 to
governments
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 action, industries,
also
 some companies have to reduce gas pollution
via
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 sharing some energy suppliers. To provide
this
 solution sun or wind energy might be used
instead
 of other dangerous types
such
 as
atom
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atomic
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 energy. To conclude,
although
somethings
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some things
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,
for
instance
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 throwing
of
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industrial
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 garbages
next
of
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to
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water
 bodies and other severe impacts are capable to emerge
a
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threat
for
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to
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 global warming, the earth can be saved from
this
 evil through plethora
measures
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of measures
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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