When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Countries all around the world have had a huge development over the decades. After several

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such

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, many new technologies have been investigated and developed over the years. Some

people

say that when technologies are developed, (

the

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traditional

skills

and ways of life will die out). They

also

own the view that (it is pointless to try and keep traditional

skills

alive). I think

people

should make a balance between modern

technology

and traditional

skills

. There is no doubt that modern

technology

is extremely efficient, whereas traditional ways have

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lower productivity.

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agriculture in the past mainly depends on the climate while modern

technology

doesn’t. If there is no rain and

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the soil

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becomes dry, those plants would die

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the past.

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new

technology

can solve it

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artificial rainfalls.

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, it takes a lot of time for

people

to cultivate crops

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traditional ways. New

technology

makes it much more convenient and faster which

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farmers’ time.

In addition

people

used to use pigeons to send envelopes to others. Nowadays,

people

only have to click on their phones and they can easily make a phone call or send messages to others.

However

, traditional

skills

are

also

very important. Traditions embody the vulture and the country is based upon the culture. The continuation of civilization highly depends on traditions. Imagine that if Chinese

people

can no more speak Chinese , are they Chinese

people

any more

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, without

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traditional

skills

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people

cannot learn basic knowledge to investigate those new technologies. In conclusion, I think both modern

technology

and traditional

skills

are very important.

People

should learn traditional

skills

and prevent them from disappearing.

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