When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Countries all around the world have had a huge development over the decades. After several
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,
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, many new technologies have been investigated and developed over the years. Some
people
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say that when technologies are developed, (
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traditional
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and ways of life will die out). They
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own the view that (it is pointless to try and keep traditional
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alive). I think
people
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should make a balance between modern
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and traditional
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. There is no doubt that modern
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is extremely efficient, whereas traditional ways have
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lower productivity.
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agriculture in the past mainly depends on the climate while modern
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doesn’t. If there is no rain and
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becomes dry, those plants would die
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the past.
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new
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can solve it
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artificial rainfalls.
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, it takes a lot of time for
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to cultivate crops
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traditional ways. New
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makes it much more convenient and faster which
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farmers’ time.
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,
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used to use pigeons to send envelopes to others. Nowadays,
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only have to click on their phones and they can easily make a phone call or send messages to others.
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, traditional
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are
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very important. Traditions embody the vulture and the country is based upon the culture. The continuation of civilization highly depends on traditions. Imagine that if Chinese
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can no more speak Chinese , are they Chinese
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any more
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?
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, without
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traditional
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skills
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people
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cannot learn basic knowledge to investigate those new technologies. In conclusion, I think both modern
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and traditional
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are very important.
People
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should learn traditional
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and prevent them from disappearing.
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