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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In the modern world, agriculture is developing and doing
their
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 best.
However
, there are
people
 who struggle to find
food
 and go hungry. From my perspective, it is due to the high prices of
food
, and
low
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the low
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salary
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salaries
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 of
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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. For the solution of
problem
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the problem
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,
government
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the government
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 could do charity
works
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work
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 and make
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programs
progrmas
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programs
 to increase the number of workers. The
government
 is improving
the
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apply
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agriculture,
although
,
do
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does
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 not notice the economical problems connected with poor citizens. Not so many
people
's earnings are enough to buy meals.
Furthermore
, the level of unemployment and homeless
people
are
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 increasing.
Thus
, a lot of
people
 can not afford any
food
 due to the lack of money. Obviously, to solve
this
 problem, there should be
balance
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a balance
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 between
prices
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the prices
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 of
food
 and
salary
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the salary
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 of workers. For
this
, there should be
controlling
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a controlling
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 system, that
regulate
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 all sides.
Also
, the
government
 should allocate money to improving the amount of employee by doing some program, that helps to find
job
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a job
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 for
every one
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. To conclude, agriculture and its advancements should be helpful to
the
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apply
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people
's life too. But if the
government
 do not do something
towards
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to
this
 problem, it will be big
problems
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problem
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 in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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