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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While some people are of the opinion homeschooling is the most appropriate method for a
child
’s growth, others believe that it is essential for
children
 to receive their education at
schools
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.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits of
both
 methods. Homeschooling is a major contributor
for
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 the development of
the
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children
 as
seeing
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 by some
parents
 due to several noteworthy advantages discussed below.
A
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 main benefit of
this
 method is that
parents
being
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 able to provide their undivided attention to the
child
 unlike at a
school
.
This
 helps to understand the actual status and the level of the
child
, due
which
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 customized curriculums can be used to improve the
child
 if he/she is lacking in a specific area.
Furthermore
, since the relationship is between the
parents
 (or tutor) and the
child
,
this
 procedure limits the risk of
children
 being exposed to bad habits
such
 as smoking, drinking alcohol and using hazardous drugs through other
children
 which is the case in the schools. Another major benefit of homeschooling is not having to undergo
the
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peer pressure.
This
 allows the
children
 to focus on
studies
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 and improve themselves with peace of mind, without having to constantly worry about unhealthy competition.
On the other hand
, some
parents
 believe sending their
children
 to
school
 is necessary. The
school
 curriculums are evaluated by relevant educational authorities and made available according to the suitable standards, having a good mixture of
both
 academic and physical education. Receiving a balanced and
a
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standardized education is the key to the
wellbeing
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 of the
child
.
In addition
 to
above
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 schooling lets
children
 to be socialized with others. It allows
children
 to learn to respect, listen and work with each other which are required to maintain successful relationships in future.
Furthermore
, having to work in teams lets
children
to
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discover their strengths
such
 as
,
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 leadership and negotiation skills.
Also
, by doing tea activities,
children
 learn to control their emotions and to treat
both
 victory and defeat in the same manner which contributes to the existence of a peaceful society.
Children
 are the future of a country. Apart from academics which can be achieved from
both
 the techniques above, it is essential for them to learn to exist in
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society as a good human
being
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beings
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which
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 is taught and experienced in schooling.
Hence
, I strongly believe that it is necessary for
the
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children
 to go to
school
 as the benefits a
child
 is exposed to outweigh the negatives and advantages of homeschooling.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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