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newspapers and books are outdated. why do some people believe this? what is your opinion?

#newspapers #books #people
It has been considered by lots of people that local
newspapers
, magazines, and
books
 are old-fashioned, especially for today's generation. I totally agree with the given statement and
this
 essay will discuss it in
further
 Paragraphs.
Firstly
, the media and the mode of getting information and reading have revolutionized to the heaven in past few decades.
Newspapers
 are limited to providing the latest information; they can only print what happened yesterday. Not only
Newspapers
 but
books
 are
also
 very time-consuming
as well as
 tedious activities to do for the teenage and adult population.
For instance
, research by Harvard University suggests that around 65% of people switched to digital options for
books
 and
Newspapers
 in the
last
 eight years.
Secondly
, the alternative options of
books
 and physical copies of
Newspapers
 are easily Comprehensible. By that I mean, audiobooks and applications for the latest updates are quite popular among the pupils in every nook and corner. There are several benefits of these advanced features
such
 as they can be with you anywhere and accessible to anyone with just a single top on their mobile screen.
for example
, a recently published study on the internet suggests that most individuals prefer to watch the news on YouTube and listen to audio recordings of
books
 on audible applications
while
 commuting. In conclusion, it can’t be denied that
books
 and
Newspapers
 are trustworthy Sources of information and they serve basic human needs but the youth are seeking easy solutions
instead
due to
 there is less effort involved in enjoying 3D movies or playing a computer game than turning the pages of
books
.
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task achievement
While your essay does a good job of explaining why some people believe newspapers and books are outdated, you should ensure your own opinion is even clearer. You could state your stance more explicitly throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the essay topic. This helps in maintaining logical flow and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors and pay attention to capitalization. For example, 'heaven' should be 'Heaven', 'Commendable' should be 'commendable', and 'top' should be 'tap'.
task achievement
You have a strong introductory paragraph that clearly states your position on the topic.
task achievement
You have utilized relevant, specific examples to support your points, such as the Harvard University research and the study about YouTube and Audible.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the points made in the essay and reiterates your stance.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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