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More and more people are using computer and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers on paper. To what extent do y ou agree or disagree?

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It is often said that
people
 tend to use computers and smart objects
such
 as smartphones and tablets in order to reach
information
 more than before.
Thus
, paper-based
books
 and
newspapers
 are not needed anymore.
This
 author's perspective is in agreement with the aforementioned statement, and in the following essay,
this
 matter is about to be debated as well. To commence with, by using electronic
devices
, we could reach
information
 much faster than the traditional way of getting
news
such
 as reading paper-based
books
, articles and
newspapers
.
For instance
, the tragic death of a 21-year-old rapper was
firstly
 announced by social media via the internet.
In contrast
, the daily
newspapers
 didn't inform their audiences of
this
news
 until the day after the incident which was much later than the internet when
people
 got the
news
 on their phones.
Therefore
, thanks to the invention of the internet accelerated the spreading of
news
 and made smart objects the best way to get informed about early
news
. Another reason is that all
people
 especially the new generation, actually the generation of z are not comfortable reading
books
, magazines and
newspapers
 on paper. As a consequence, the rate of purchasing paper-based
newspapers
, articles and
books
 would experience a massive reduction. These young
people
 have undeniable attachments to their computers and electrical
devices
, they are informed by these
devices
 nowadays. Despite the effectiveness of paper-based versions of
newspapers
 and
books
, there is no demand for
this
 kind of
information
 right now. In conclusion, the rate of
people
 who use personal and electronic
devices
 to obtain
information
 is increasing, and many
people
 believe that no book, article or newspaper on paper is in demand. It seems that computers and electrical
devices
 are enough for
people
 to be informed with
first
-hand
news
instead
 of reading papers.
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