Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time. Discuss both these views and give your opinion?
Some argued that sports lesson is crucial to
children
while others think it better
to learn and study Add a missing verb
is better
others
major Correct quantifier usage
other
subjects
instead
. Physical lesson focus on exercise but other major lessons improve our understanding way the real-world work. This
essay will discuss both opinion
and give Change to a plural noun
opinions
it
own opinion.
While some believe that focusing more on physical education subject Correct pronoun usage
its
are
very crucial to Change the verb form
is
children
. Playing sports in physical educations class
help improve children
health. Change noun form
children's
For example
, many students who participated in their P.E class
have better health and good mental strength, because as they work out their body release a chemical that reduce
anxiety, we can see that many people who work out live longer than others that didn’t exercise. Change the verb form
reduces
Thus
, physical education class
prolong our life and improve our Fix the agreement mistake
classes
body
to Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
be
healthy.
The major lessons in school help us advance our knowledge. By teaching all the Unnecessary verb
apply
subjects
that
is
needed for applying Change the verb form
are
any
Change preposition
to any
subjects
in university. For instance
, chemistry class
teach students about chemicals and elements this
experience help student who is looking to apply a
job or university that required Change preposition
for a
the
knowledge about chemicals Correct article usage
apply
this
not only apply to chemistry subject but also
subjects
like business, astronomy, and biology classes. Hence
, advance and improve our understanding so we can use this
in the future.
In conclusion, physical subjects
help us stay fit and healthy and academics
lessons help advance our understanding and prepare us for the real world. Change the noun form
academic
Therefore
, both of these subjects
are equally important to children
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