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year

off after

school

before joining a university, is a trend these days.

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, as every coin has two faces,

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ideology has its fair share of advantages and disadvantages.

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about advantages, there is a positive side to

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theory. It helps in countering stress,

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accumulated

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accumulated

by years of studying in

school

furthermore

, it

also

helps in making a choice, a decision of whether you want to continue your education in a particular field or you want to do anything else.

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, I was a brilliant student

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first

class

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school

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, but after

school

I was tired and I decided to take a

year

off to explore and know myself better. It greatly helped me in my future, as I got time to heal and gather enough strength to do in my future.

In contrast

this

, there is

also

a downside to

this

scheme. In most cases, the student sometimes

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that they are different from their classmates, as they are older compared to them.

Furthermore

, a

year

off sometimes results in forgetting some concepts, which makes it harder, and more difficult for some people to understand them.

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thing happened

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for example

although

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fruitful

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for me

however

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, I forgot the basic concept of right shift operator and left shift operator. Which resulted in learning python

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for me.

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can be

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That is

why one should consider both factors before making any decision.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

259 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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