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Some parents think parents should attend child care courses to learn how to take care of their children. Do you agree?

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Taking a
year
 off after
school
 before joining a university, is a trend these days.
However
, as every coin has two faces,
similarly
this
 ideology has its fair share of advantages and disadvantages.
Taking
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 about advantages, there is a positive side to
this
 theory. It helps in countering stress,
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accumulated
accumalated
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accumulated
 by years of studying in
school
,
furthermore
, it
also
 helps in making a choice, a decision of whether you want to continue your education in a particular field or you want to do anything else.
For example
, I was a brilliant student
from
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 my
first
 class
of
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school
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, but after
school
 I was tired and I decided to take a
year
 off to explore and know myself better. It greatly helped me in my future, as I got time to heal and gather enough strength to do in my future.
In contrast
 to
this
, there is
also
 a downside to
this
 scheme. In most cases, the student sometimes
feel
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 that they are different from their classmates, as they are older compared to them.
Furthermore
, a
year
 off sometimes results in forgetting some concepts, which makes it harder, and more difficult for some people to understand them.
Same
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 thing happened
with
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 me
for example
,
although
 a
year
 off was
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fruitful
fruitfull
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fruitful
 for me
however
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, I forgot the basic concept of right shift operator and left shift operator. Which resulted in learning python
difficult
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 for me.
Therefore
,
this
 ideology though harmless and advantageous to one
,
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 can be
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harmful
harmfull
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harmful
 to
other
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.
That is
 why one should consider both factors before making any decision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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