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Being a celebrity brings problems as well as benefits

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In today’s World,
Celebrity
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 status has
high
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 level of respectable position in
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society
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 which is
being
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discussed in the below essay. In recent times, being a
celebrity
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 set out
a
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luxurious viability, together
honorable
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 position in
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society
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, celebrities recognize locally and globally which comes various opportunities to become generous and stronger.
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, we do have a huge
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celebrity
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celebrities
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 like
Mr.
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Sharukh khan,
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and Mr.
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Mr.
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 Johnny Depp in
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the filmy
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filmy
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film
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 industry whereas
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 Kohli
in
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 sports (Cricket) whose life is filled up with exhilaration and virtuosity. Having a
celebrity
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 status in
Society
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, Actors/Sports stars becoming millionaires and leading a successful
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 in the world.
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, there are always two sides
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 the coin, being a
celebrity
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also
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run
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in to
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 numerous complications which
effects
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to
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mental torture
at
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 some cases. Putdown
lot
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 of
efforts
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 to prove themselves in
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 world.
Balanced
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 diet and exercise to be followed to be fit and maintenance.
In most
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 of the
times
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, though they have a lot of cravings, forcefully they have to control their
tasty
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 buds
for
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maintain
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 good health and figure.
Lot
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 of challenges must face to balance the hard situations,
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: Film stars
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 to
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 perform well
otherwise
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 fans would harm them, as
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cases
seen
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 in Film Industry,
sports
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and sports
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 like Cricket. Freedom for celebrities is completely different for them compared to normal people as they constantly receive annoying calls or
being
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 stalked by strangers. In conclusion, being a
celebrity
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 is not an easy job, to achieve
this
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, one has to put
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 efforts day and night to
fulfill
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 their dreams. Celebrities have to be cautious while interacting with
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People
in
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the
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events and public Gatherings. If everything supports
in
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the situation,
Celebrity
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 life is
most
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the most
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 precious part
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if
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of
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human’s
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human
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 life which gives
huge
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a huge
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 name and Fame in
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society
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