In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?

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In some countries owning a
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rather than renting one is very important for citizens. In my perception,
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is outrightly advantageous to a large extent. My inclination is explained with valid reasons and
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of all, The fundamental reason for my inclination is that
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For many
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home
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is an ocean of memories, and emotions,
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it is a support for their
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believe that they should keep
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emotional, and precious memory
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one place,
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birth to death they want to be in the same
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where they have lived their every stage of
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. Even if someone is away from
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in their mid-age, for work, they want one place where they can spend their retirement.
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is not just a
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of bricks for them, It is the album of every
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of
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, good-bad, happy-sad, laugh-cry, even
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marriage
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marriage
and death.
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,
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is an asset, which can help an individual in their difficult situations
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life
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. In many countries like India, The
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is a saviour of difficult times.
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or bad financial
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conditions
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can sell or keep their
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as
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a mortgage
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will rescue them.
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, majorly
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do
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for
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emergency
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education, and
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marriage
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functions.
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, there are some negatives
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owning a
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. Relocation is not easily possible. In
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house
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, relocation is so
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convenient
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convenient
and fast. For some
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, Owning
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house
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will come with
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the burden
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of
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a loan
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. In conclusion, Though there are
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downsides, I strongly think that owning a
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is a better choice for
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. As
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is part of
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and
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a valuable asset.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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