As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society?

At the present time, with the advancement of countries, people tend to reduce their communications and make their family
members
smaller in comparison with their past ancestors. I will discuss
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phenomenon and how its impact on individuals in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, with the Improvement of technology, connections between people are changed. To clarify, using new devices has a lot of impact on society.
For instance
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range of social media applications.
Consequently
, they prefer to make connections with others in virtual ways,
instead
of face-to-face
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. Due to
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fact, the role of traditional communication has
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day by day.
As a result
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generation
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to live individually or have small family
members
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. Another reason
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the changes in jobs, it means, the cost of facilities
such
as
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housing,
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, and many other necessary things are going higher. So, a number of people have to migrate to bigger cities and spend most of their time
to work
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. For
this
reason, they have to live alone, because they migrate without their family.
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not much free time to make a family with numerous
members
.
On the other hand
,
this
new trend can cause a lot of destructive effects on society and especially, culture. Family plays a vital role in
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of children. So, with changing families,
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of toddlers
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influenced. Regardless
that is
positive or negative.
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effect that I can mention, is
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the connection between families. With the
reducing
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of the
members
of
family
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, the role of its communication is diminished , and it can impose a number of harmful
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on society. Because the family strong has a significant impact on some cultures. To conclude my essay, undoubtedly, the way of living style is changed in new societies, and individuals tend to live alone or in a small family. In my point of view, it has a number of dreadful
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on the new era , and in the near
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we will see the illustration of that
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