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Many parents today employ private tutors to teach their children school hours. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there are many parents who are keen on hiring private teachers to home-school their
children
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. Its effect on
children
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 is being questioned whether it gives a negative or positive development. In my opinion, I am in absolute agreement that
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 can have a negative impact on them.
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 of all, socialization, which is lacking in being home-schooled, is vital to
children
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's growth and development. As far as emotional, psychological and physical aspects are concerned, it is important for a child to mingle and play with other
children
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 in their growing years. Having someone to interact with, allows a child to develop emotional intelligence, build up some strength, and gain more insights.
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, interactive games will allow a child to be mentally alert, and physically active, and will enhance their ability to work in a team.
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, a student who has studied in a reputable school with a physical building, will not have a difficulty in getting their academic backgrounds honoured in the future. Academic records are most of the time a requirement for employment or studying abroad. As home-schooling is not generally acknowledged globally, it could not ease their future transaction. In conclusion, I am of the firm belief that employing a private tutor will not be beneficial to school-aged
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 as compared to enrolling them on a campus with other students. It will affect their character, and their mental, and physical health.
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, it could possibly trouble them in gathering scholastic records in future transfer and employment.
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