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Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solution should be given?

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People
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 often influence by various attractive advertisements and purchase
products
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such
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 as dresses and shoes.
people
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 buy those items they actually don't need and online shopping is
also
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 significantly increasing due to the variety of sales offers these are the two primary issues that occur through advertisements.
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, these problems can be resolved if increase the prices of all categories of
products
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 as well as the rise in delivery charges for online customers. Certainly,
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people
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 these days love to shop for themselves and for their families, due to which men can easily be entertained through kind of advertising brochures and make purchases for those things which are not necessary for their day-to-day lives.
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, online shopping is now easy, with just one click, a particular product is at your home, and e-commerce websites offer a range of modern clothes and shoes, under limited-time sale offers, which makes
people
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 conscious to immediately avail of the offers.
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, 25% of women often buy
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 which are less important than men, reported in a fashion magazine
last
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 year. These problems can be overcome if we increase the prices of every trending product and reduces the daily sales offers. Delivery boys should charge higher amounts to online consumers
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 helps to the reduction in e-commerce stores. For ,example online stores like Daraz and Amazon make shopping convenient for every class of buyers by selling every product in a range of lower to
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higher amounts. In conclusion, advertising new
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 encourage
people
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 to buy dresses and shoes more often, which
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