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Many businesses choose to recruit from within their own country rather than sourcing staff from overseas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, entrepreneurs prefer to employ their staff from their fellow citizens rather than recruit a
workforce
 from foreign countries.
While
 there are some drawbacks associated with hiring compatriots, I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of employing people from their own country may be depriving them of global competition. Globalization has been taking place so fast and international communication is not only a demand but
also
 a determining factor in increasing companies’ economic growth.
In other words
, recruiting staff from other countries may open a world of opportunity to various perspectives and cultures which can promote innovation and competitiveness.
As a result
, the overseas
workforce
 may boost the efficiency of businesses. Another perceived negative is that companies which choose their employees from other countries are more likely to improve cross-cultural communications leading to earning higher income and developing relations among customers and traders.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of sourcing the workers from fellow citizens is that local employees are more familiar with the local market, language and social norms, which makes it easier for them to integrate into the company’s culture and work effectively. To clarify, being in harmony with the job environment helps employees reduce their stress and have the self-esteem to accomplish their tasks confidently.
Consequently
, it may lead to making much more profit for the company compared with the overseas workers. A
further
 benefit is recruiting a local
workforce
 can reduce the cost of employment as there is no need to arrange visas or work permits for them. From an economic standpoint, hiring compatriots brings many significant benefits for businesses, namely decreasing the possibility of cultural
clash
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 which leads to different problems between colleagues.
For instance
, a foreigner may be unwilling to blend into the host country’s culture,
therefore
, misunderstandings may happen during the work process. On balance, it is true that recruiting a local
workforce
 would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, in my view, its positive effects in terms of decreasing potential cultural issues and spending less money outweigh the disadvantages.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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