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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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There is a possible danger for youngsters, while they’re growing
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 to committing a crime. As long as Misleading numbers
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 young ages are still growing, the danger is still standing.
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 energy isn't guided in the correct way, it could corrupt their entire life.
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 to prison in the most essential time of their life, while they should be exploring their talents and gifts. Another
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 tends to be
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 of financial support. Providing that these particular
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 Children had
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 proper parents, they might have ended up on a different road. Turning to possible remedies, an obvious step would be to be tough on crime, so the young criminals have
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 realization if they commit an offence against anything, the government would be strict with them, and there is no way back. Another way to deal with these problems might be developing the social work industry
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 unless we want to see
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young people turning to become a criminal one by one just because they cannot afford the cost of living.
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, these special social workers could be the key to their problems. In conclusion, the factors of shortage of money could be the main cause. A
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 social work institute may well lessen the severity of the situation.
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