All cars that bruns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them Do you agree or disagree?
Cars
which use
fossil fuels
ought to be replaced by electronically operated ones.I completely agree with this
opinion since vehicles
operated electronically have more benefits than the ones operated with fossil fuels
.
First
of all,cars
or vehicles
operated by the
fossil Correct article usage
apply
fuels
cause pollution.In other words
,the
smoke Correct article usage
apply
emmission
Correct your spelling
emission
emissions
cause
air pollution Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
hence
it has a direct effect on people.Furthermore
,it also
creates noise pollution,for
example
Add a comma
,example
vehicles
with loud noise are irritating and cause a lot of distubances
,especially in city areas where there are lots of Correct your spelling
disturbances
disturbance
vehicles
,therefore
it is very hard to sleep or to have a conversation.Hence
electroniacally
operated Correct your spelling
electronically
electrically
cars
or vehicles
do not Correct your spelling
emit
emmit
poisonous smoke or create loud noise as well.
Correct your spelling
emit
Secondly
, the
fossil Correct article usage
apply
fuels
are so much in use
nowadays and a time will come that
there would no longer be any left.The Correct word choice
when
Correct your spelling
availability
availabilty
of it is another issue whereas electrical Correct your spelling
availability
cars
can be charged at home and the power supply would not be an issue.In
addition
it would save a lot of time.Add a comma
,addition
For instance
,going to service stations to fuel up and sometimes standing in long queues chews up Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
of time,Correct your spelling
a lot
therefoe
Correct your spelling
therefore
electonically
operated Correct your spelling
electronically
vehicles
are more convenient.Correct your spelling
Furthermore
Furtermore
,the Correct your spelling
Furthermore
use
of fossil fuels
has been there for years now,like it is becoming a
old source so Change the article
an
that is
why it should be replaced with Correct your spelling
something
someting
more modern and convenient.
To sum up,though Correct your spelling
something
fossil operated
Add a hyphen
fossil-operated
cars
are in use
for years and people have habit
of it Add an article
a habit
the habit
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
i
strongly believe that Change the capitalization
I
electronically operated
Add a hyphen
electronically-operated
vehicles
are more convenient and safe to use
now and in future as well.Submitted by prasadpriya931 on
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