All cars that bruns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them Do you agree or disagree?

Cars
which
use
fossil
fuels
ought to be replaced by electronically operated ones.I completely agree with
this
opinion since
vehicles
operated electronically have more benefits than the ones operated with fossil
fuels
.
First
of all,
cars
or
vehicles
operated by
the
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fossil
fuels
cause pollution.
In other words
,
the
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smoke
emmission
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emission
emissions
cause
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causes
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air pollution
hence
it has a direct effect on people.
Furthermore
,it
also
creates noise pollution,
for
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vehicles
with loud noise are irritating and cause a lot of
distubances
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disturbances
disturbance
,especially in city areas where there are lots of
vehicles
,
therefore
it is very hard to sleep or to have a conversation.
Hence
electroniacally
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electronically
electrically
operated
cars
or
vehicles
do not
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emit
emmit
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emit
poisonous smoke or create loud noise as well.
Secondly
,
the
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fossil
fuels
are so much in
use
nowadays and a time will come
that
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there would no longer be any left.The
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availability
availabilty
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availability
of it is another issue whereas electrical
cars
can be charged at home and the power supply would not be an issue.
In
addition
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it would save a lot of time.
For instance
,going to service stations to fuel up and sometimes standing in long queues chews up
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a lot
alot
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a lot
of time,
therefoe
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therefore
electonically
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electronically
operated
vehicles
are more convenient.
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Furthermore
Furtermore
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Furthermore
,the
use
of fossil
fuels
has been there for years now,like it is becoming
a
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old source so
that is
why it should be replaced with
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something
someting
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something
more modern and convenient. To sum up,though
fossil operated
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fossil-operated
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cars
are in
use
for years and people have
habit
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a habit
the habit
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of it
but
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i
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strongly believe that
electronically operated
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electronically-operated
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vehicles
are more convenient and safe to
use
now and in future as well.
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