Some people believe that increasing taxes on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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notion that implementing
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rate
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all industry sectors will aid in mitigating
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pollution, while there are others who argue that other methods seem more effective. In my opinion, I strongly believe that there are far more influential ways to dwindle the level of contamination. On the one hand, people who advocate
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raising the amount of taxes to each industry field
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rational
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that it is the low
tax
rate
that is
destroying the environment. To be specific, factories are dumping
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and neither being
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responsible
reasponsible
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responsible
nor feeling guilty in that they are producing tonnes of
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as the
tax
only takes a fraction of their
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, which would by no means
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if they had to pay
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amount of taxes which will have a
davastating
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devastating
impact on their net profit.
Therefore
, if the
tax
rate increases, the world would likely
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witness
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positive impact as soon as they
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expected.
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, I am
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of
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opinion that extra taxes will not be
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in the long term perspective, and other measures
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more rational. Despite the fact that the government has increased the
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cigarette
price in order to reduce the number of people smoking, it is
undeliable
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undeniable
unreliable
that
this
policy seemed effective for a short period. What I mean is that
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money related
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legislations
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would not be
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affordable way in the long term.
Therefore
, other methods
such
as intensive law would positively exert on improving the environment level steadily. Apart from that
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depth education is another key method to encourage people to become more responsible and less
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in that they will be loaded with not only the fact that they are the
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who
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exacerbating
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nature but
also
the ethics
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being a human
being
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. In conclusion,
although
high penalties will affect the industry, strict schemes and educational parts are the prime
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that will not only ease the problems but
also
make a better world in terms of humanity.
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