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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Modern advancements have made a major impact on nature
such
 as the advanced engines of cars which create harmful gases . It is thought by some that these ought to be sorted internationally,
however
 other opine solutions on the national level is the best way. Both views are discussed in upcoming paragraphs with examples.
To begin
 with, changes in the environment are due to an increase in the pollution that has been created by all countries . The primary sources of pollution are industries, transportation and so on.
Hence
, it is the responsibility of the entire world to make efforts for halting
this
 damage.
For instance
, Pakistan confronted the huge loss of lives, and properties because of floods due to global warming. The country is very small and less polluted but had to face
this
 challenge.
However
, there are more ways nationally that can be more effective. Every country can impose new rules to avoid exposing nature and rule-breakers can be fined. It is easy for a nation to overlook precisely which is very hard globally.
For example
, in India, in 2014, the government implemented a rule to check the pollution of vehicles monthly which helped to lessen it as recorded in 2015. In conclusion, problem-related
with
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 the environment needs to be solved all over the world as it is a global issue that can ,while a national scale aid to decrease it more as authorities have the right to make discipline.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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