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Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #countries #world #communities
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There has been a lot of discussion revolving around the issue of helping
others
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. Some
people
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 believe that they and their
countries
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 should help
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 in need abroad, while another part of society thinks that efforts should only be put to help local communities and
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. Personally, I am in favour of the view that encourages to assist
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 internationally.
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 with, aid to social groups in need abroad makes
people
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 broaden their mindset towards the world.
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, travelling to Africa on a mission to build new schools and teach children lets the person learn new traditions, way of life in other than native country, and even significant skills,
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 as a new language. All that leads to a better understanding of different
people
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 and cultures,
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 turning the helper
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 a more respectful and intelligent person. Another considerable advantage of supporting
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 beyond the borders of the home country is getting appreciation and respect.
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, from the beginning of the war in Ukraine,
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 government, municipalities, NGOs and residents have donated millions of euros as humanitarian and military aid. The European Union, as well as its
countries
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 and Ukraine, see the effort as a shining example of diplomacy;
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, if anything happens in Lithuania, its citizens will be calm that they will receive the needed cooperation. To conclude, helping
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 and
countries
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 internationally is a way to self-development and international recognition.
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, everyone should put effort to not only watch themselves
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 but
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 to see what is happening abroad and how they can be beneficial.
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