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These days, more father's stay at home and take care of their children, and mother's go to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you believe that this is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that in
this
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 modern era fathers stay at the house and take concern of their kindergarten, while mothers will be going effort The reason is that nowadays many jobs will prefer their employees mainly
women
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instead
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 of Men's. In my view
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 is a negative trend, Because house
care
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 responsibilities will only be for girls I will discuss a few aspects in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with the positive side, Today's technology is advancing day by day and many nations will be developing very fastly and large industries
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,
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, All types of skills will provide
women
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 because their brain abilities will better than men's and their knowledge is high level and their working hour will focus only for their task.
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, In British news channels reveal headlines every business will be successful with the help of
women
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's workers because they serve as a good idea for growing new businesses.
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,
women
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 have an important role in society
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 they forget their responsibilities
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 as family
care
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. To commence with the negative trend, The father
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staying at home is not good for their gender because Men will be working in a company
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 of taking
care
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 of their
child
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 at home. To explain, The house
care
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 responsibility is for girls because they don't need to
work
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 outside and every essential thing will be provided by their Man and they good take
care
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 of their family.
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 job for their wife after their newborn baby's birth because they need to take
care
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 of their kids.
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, both gender will be good for their own sides but
women
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 are an essential part of their region's new youth. In conclusion, mothers only load on their children because their fathers will
work
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 hard for their life and is not allowed to unit's stay at home.
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,
The
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boy is good at companies to
work
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besides
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 doing household struggle
such
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 as making food is not a good activity for
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 gender.

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