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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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It has been noticed that a group of
people
 think that nobody will purchase printed
books
 or newspapers in the future, as everything will be available online. If questioned, I disagree with
this
 viewpoint to a large extent. My
inclincation
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inclination
 is explained with valid reasons and appropriate examples. The fundamental reason for my inclination is that technology can not replace the human touch, like a hug.
Similarly
, Online
books
 can not replace the sense of feeling attached
with
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printed
books
. When the reader opens the
book
, the aura coming out from the new
book
 is irreplaceable. Printed
books
 help
individuals
 to focus on reading, as there will be no distractions, like social media
notification
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notifications
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 etc.
Moreover
, Most
of
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the
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successful
people
has
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have
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 suggested youth
to
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read
books
,
best
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 teacher
of
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in
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 life. To add to
this
,
Book
 lovers believe that if
individuals
 will read from a physical
book
, they will be easily able to imagine and feel themselves in the
book-world
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.
Furthermore
, After covid-19
people
 have
became
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 more health
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conscious
concious
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conscious
.
Thus
, apart from doing physical activities. They try to stay away from technology once
in
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a month, during
this
 time
people
 try to read
books
. Now that became
habit
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a habit
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 for them, as it gives peace and relaxation from the outer world to the person. On top of that, Digital
books
gives
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 eyes strain to the reader.
Also
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,Also
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 all online
books
 are not freely available on the internet.
However
, it is not overlooked that,
individuals
 can easily purchase online
books
, anytime anywhere compare to physical
books
.
Also
 even if it is paid, it will be cheaper than
printed
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a printed
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book
. To conclude, Though there are a few drawbacks to buying a physical
book
, I firmly believe that
individuals
 will buy printed
books
 or newspapers in the future.
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