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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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It has been noticed that a group of
people
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 think that nobody will purchase printed
books
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 or newspapers in the future, as everything will be available online. If questioned, I disagree with
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 viewpoint to a large extent. My
inclincation
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inclination
 is explained with valid reasons and appropriate examples. The fundamental reason for my inclination is that technology can not replace the human touch, like a hug.
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, Online
books
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 can not replace the sense of feeling attached
with
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to
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printed
books
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. When the reader opens the
book
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, the aura coming out from the new
book
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 is irreplaceable. Printed
books
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 help
individuals
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 to focus on reading, as there will be no distractions, like social media
notification
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 etc.
Moreover
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, Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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successful
people
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has
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have
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 suggested youth
to
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apply
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read
books
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,
best
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the best
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 teacher
of
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in
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 life. To add to
this
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,
Book
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 lovers believe that if
individuals
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 will read from a physical
book
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, they will be easily able to imagine and feel themselves in the
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book-world
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book world
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.
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, After covid-19
people
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 have
became
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 more health
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conscious
concious
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conscious
.
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, apart from doing physical activities. They try to stay away from technology once
in
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a month, during
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 time
people
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 try to read
books
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. Now that became
habit
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a habit
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 for them, as it gives peace and relaxation from the outer world to the person. On top of that, Digital
books
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gives
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 eyes strain to the reader.
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Also
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 all online
books
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 are not freely available on the internet.
However
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, it is not overlooked that,
individuals
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 can easily purchase online
books
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, anytime anywhere compare to physical
books
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.
Also
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 even if it is paid, it will be cheaper than
printed
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a printed
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book
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. To conclude, Though there are a few drawbacks to buying a physical
book
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, I firmly believe that
individuals
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 will buy printed
books
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 or newspapers in the future.
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