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Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 think that it is better to live in hot and sunny countries, while some
people
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 think that it is better to live in cold countries.
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 it is dangerous to store taxa in cold regions, it is useful for various green
vegetables
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. Personally, I love summer because summer is one of the best seasons to live in, but winter is a good season to store fruits and
vegetables
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. On the one hand, fresh
vegetables
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 and fruits are abundant in winter. At
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 time, healthy, green leafy
vegetables
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such
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 as beets and carrots become cheaper and affordable for
people
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 who don’t have a lot of money.
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 situation
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 causes the population to eat enough. In some countries, carrots, beets, lemons and similar fruits and
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 become almost cheaper during the winter season. But I don’t think cold weather is good for a person.
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,
summer
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the summer
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 season is extremely hot and
people
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 sweat because of
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.
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people
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 use air conditioners and have a strange feeling. Even during high heat,
people
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 don’t have to stay indoors, they can go out and relax on the beaches.
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, even when the day is very hot, they can go to different beaches and have a family vacation without using air conditioners.Going on vacation with your family on a nice warm day is a great way to move freely and be active. In conclusion, a sunny day makes
people
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 feel better and
people
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 spend a lot of time with their family members. Cold weather only makes for healthier food, so I choose warmer days.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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