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Some people believe that professionanls, such as doctor and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they shoul be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
 are concerned about where professionals are going to work. On the one hand,
people
 support them staying in the same location where all
students
 have done their training,
however
,
on the other hand
, another portion of the population
consider
Correct subject-verb agreement
considers
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 that all graduates should have the option to choose where they want to work. Personally, I firmly believe that
students
 should have the option to choose what they want as a human right, regardless of the wishes of the population. It is considered that if
people
 work in the same place where they have studied, they have the possibility to give back the resources that the country has invested in these
students
.
In addition
, all these graduates have the opportunity to put into practice all the new knowledge they have learned.
Moreover
, it would be easier for
this
 community of
students
 to get used to the workplace due to knowing the facilities and the different methods performed by the workers.
Nevertheless
, in spite of these opinions, there exist others who do not agree with
it
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them
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. One argument against
this
 measure is that
people
 cannot be forced to stay in a location where they don’t want to.
Furthermore
, many
people
 do their training in different countries, not all in one, so it would be a hard situation to design.
Finally
, speaking for myself I could not agree with the
first
 option because of all these arguments. To conclude, I have never really thought about
this
 situation, and I guess you must analyze both the pros and cons to come up with a suitable solution.
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