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nowadays the increasing of garbage (waste) is a real concern. why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem?

#garbage #waste #concern
In recent times, the Rise of
Garbage
 is a global issue all over the world.
This
 essay examines some of the troubles caused by debris on the entire planet and suggests some viable remedies to curb the grave concerns.
To begin
 with, Extensively growth of population, and urbanization leads to one of the causes of the increase in
waste
 in the world. ,
Moreover
 corporate companies release a ton of
garbage
 every year in the process of production of mobile phones and electronic vehicles.Humans do not have awareness of in recycling process of
waste
 acquires from kitchens, houses, and industries. consumption of plastic bags is
also
 one of the problems rising from the
garbage
 in the world.
In addition
 to
this
, Government and society have to work hand in hand to mitigate the
garbage
 concern.
Firstly
, various awareness programs like recycling
waste
, plastic usage in homes and maintaining dust bins on streets need to be initiated to the public. Perhaps, Humans ought to take some prominent measures in reducing wastage. The administration should pass strict laws for industries whoever is creating a vast amount of
waste
 in process of production of electronic items. In conclusion, Both Government and society required equal contribution in eliminating of
garbage
 problem in the nation. The Swach Bharat
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already been implemented by our Honourable prime minister Mr Narendra Modi which brought awareness among people in India. ,
,
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However
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 society has a prominent role to reduce the
garbage
 in the nation and its mandatory that everyone has to work cooperatively to see more changes in the future
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