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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
 tend to think that the best way to improve
road
 safety is to increase the minimum, acceptable
age
 for driving
car
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 or motorcycle. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
 statement, because
reduction
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the reduction
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 of young
people
 with
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a licence
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licence
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 will stimulate safety. In the following
essay
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 I am going to give reasons and present other effective measures. One of the
first
 things we need to take into consideration is that young
people
most
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 likely to
broke
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 the rules, mainly because of
the
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 unstable emotional background and lack of experience.
For example
, we can see the tendency of young
people
 on the roads in Western counties, where the
age
 of children who can drive a car varies from 14 to 17. As
it
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known
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is known
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, at
this
age
 children are the most hormone unstable, they tend to make compulsive decisions,
such
 as overspending, carelessness on the
road
 leading to accidents,
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and weather
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weather
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whether
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 older drivers are better at making logical actions in extreme situations.
However
,
this
 is not the only solution.
Firstly
, the government should invest money in improving the quality of roads, bridges, intersections,
signs
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and signs
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 in order to help drivers drive safely.
Secondly
, putting money into
road
 cleaning or heating, to minimise crash cases.
For instance
, during winter highways are getting slippery and icy, and collisions on the roads happen often. To conclude, I consider that driving
age
 plays a huge role in
improvement
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the improvement
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 of
road
 safety, but in my
opinion
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 other measures are effective as well.
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