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Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #crimes #adults #authorities
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 era, whether teenagers should be punished
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 when they commit
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 or not has been a debatable issue among any one region. In my opinion, I strongly believe that there should be better
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interventions
inverventions
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discipline
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youngsters who
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 the law.
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, it is partly true that there is no difference between
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adolescents
 and adults in that someone will eventually be killed or injured by
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them. There is no denying the fact that not only at school but from their parents, students are all taught to be
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decent social
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. Even though their maturity level is lower
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 the adults', they are equipped with
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 knowledge that
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 should be punished.
However
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recent research conducted by the US government, they provided a statistic that shows the increase
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 crime rates among people in their 10s.
Thus
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 phenomenon can be safe to say that teenagers are exploiting less strict laws to commit
crimes
.
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, despite the fact that the number of
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 rising due to
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poor schemes, I am convinced that the government needs to introduce better methods to deal with
this
 problem. It is undeniable that teenagers are still in their formative period, which means that they are not fully grown in terms of their
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 function to think what is right or wrong. In detail, students might commit
crimes
 by accident.
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, if they are forced to spend 10 years in jail, they will no longer be able to live their life
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 others do. In detail, those who
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 through the same step as how the adults are punished
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 would probably be socially inept and do not have any skills to continue their life in the
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 measures, which can aid in increasing
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 awareness of
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crime should be promoted and facilitated by the government. In conclusion,
although
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society will witness positive impacts on reducing the crime rates arising when they apply the same level of
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 regardless of people's age, I am firm of the opinion that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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