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Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 prefer to stay at their own place in the same area for their lifetime, while others rather
prefer
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 live in different accommodations. In the following paragraphs, both these viewpoints will be discussed in detail.
People
 who have grown up in the same area since they were young are unsurprising that they want to live in their hometown for the entire time. Due to they get to similar with that area and their family or
freinds
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friends
 would
be stay
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 nearly. It is obvious that
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
people
 want to live in their safe zone which is surrounded by close
people
 or used
to
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places.
However
, there are other types of
people
 that are able to change their accommodations regularly.
In other words
, they do not strict in the same place. Undoubtedly, they want to live
another
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 place because they want to face other cultural experiences or travelling. In conclusion, it depends on the personality of
people
 and which accommodation they prefer to live
for
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 their whole life.
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