Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subject that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

It is irrefutable that education plays a vital role in defining and improving the career and personality of an individual.Some people believe that university students should have the freedom to choose their subjects.
On the other hand
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technology
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To begin
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subjects they want to.
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score more and understand easily. Forcing them will never make them comfortable and
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leads to stress. There are many fields other than
science
and
technology
like IT industries, where they are being paid well.
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balance.
On the contrary
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technology
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individuals performing.
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will be getting low
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compared to
science
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should encourage students to discover new talents. To recapitulate, I strongly support that each and every individual should have the
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to choose their education. At the same time, encouraging them in
science
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technology
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our society. Sometimes people use their freedom in
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way. In
such
cases, parents should force them in selecting the courses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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