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Many manufactured food and drinks products contain a high level of sugar, cause health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree?

#food #drinks #products #level #sugar #health #people
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 content in manufactured
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 and drinks had contributed so much to bad health and diseases among
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. Several companies care less about the ingredients they put in their manufactured
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 items,they are more concerned about making profits.In the
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 should be more expensive to encourage
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 to consume less
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. Most soft drinks have toxins in them, for ,example, a 340ml coca cola can
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 level is equivalent to fourteen tablespoons of brown
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, that alone is deadly considering that cooldrinks are cheap and one can afford five cans of coca cola per day , and
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 has caused so much obese in
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, resulting in heart and pulmonary problems.These diseases have crippled so many healthcare systems in the world and can be easily avoided if consumer laws are put in place Business owners have made it
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 mission to false advertise
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products
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 and lure our society to take more and more of these toxins.Cereals and canned
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 are
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 some of these
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 that are toxic and young
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 love
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 which makes it easy for them to become victims of diseases at a very early age. In my opinion,
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 items with high
sugar
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 content must be expensive at the market and must not be easily afforded, in that case, the population will rather opt for cheaper and healthy
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 most of the time than badly manufactured
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. There should be laws for manufacturing companies not to be allowed to false advertise sugary
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.Communities need platforms where they should be taught the advantages and disadvantages of
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 .Natural
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 which is plant-based should be encouraged.
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