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Due to the use of the computers and mobile phones, letter-writing ability is disappearing.To what extent do you agree? Write at least 250 words.

#computers #phones #ability
Introduction
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 of
computers
 and cell phones led to
disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of practical
corresponding
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correspondence
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.In my opinion,
i
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I
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 agree that through modern technologies,it is much more convenient to correspond rather than the practical method of
letter
 writing.
One
 evident benefit of
introduction
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the introduction
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 of
computers
 and mobile phones would be that
people
 are connected to each other on daily basis.
In other words
,
people
 are just
one
 click away from each other or from their loved ones.
For instance
, video calls from a cell phone to a person far away in
foreign
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a foreign
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 country
makes
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make
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 it very convenient and real.
In addition
,even from
computers
people
 now can call,
text
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and text
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 from different sites and apps
such
 as Facebook.It saves a lot of
time
 since texting and calling are just instant,
one
 does not wait for long for replies.Another added advantage is that
one
 does not have to stand in long queues
hence
 saves
time
 and money.
On the other hand
,
letter
 writing is considered
as
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apply
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more emotionally attached to
people
.
In other words
,older generations prefer
letter
 writing rather than these modern technologies since it is a lot
difficult
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more difficult
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 for them to cope with.Expressing their feelings and emotions and taking their own
time
 and pace
is
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are
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 very important to older generations.
For example
,my grandfather is more comfortable writing letters
at
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on
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 his own
time
 rather than typing on the
keyboards
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keyboard
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 of a computer.
First
 of all,he cannot see well and
secondly
 it chews most of his
time
. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 believe that
though
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although
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letter
 writing is more practical and
one
 can
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express
exress
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express
 his or her emotions well but
living
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live
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 in
this
 modern and advanced era ,technologies
such
 as
computers
 and cell phones can not be ignored.
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