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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do the adventage outweigh the disadvantages?

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With rapid globalisation, more and more people tend to study abroad at an early age in every country.
As a result
, most schools organize a visiting
programme
 for internationals,
however
, currently, there is a debate about whether it would be positive or negative for society. In my opinion, the cultural exchange
programme
 has more advantages than disadvantages. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks to
this
programme
 of international exchange, especially among young
students
. Youngsters are easily attracted by appearance and atmosphere;
hence
 they might unforeseen certain vital criteria
such
 as the quality of education, academic achievement, and safety.
Moreover
, the fact that international tuition fees are much higher than domestic, which means that even if
students
 pursue their dream to study abroad, parents might be unable to support them financially.
As a result
, only affordable families can get the benefits of visiting foreign school programmes.
On the other hand
, the merits of
this
programme
 are apparent. 
Firstly
, teenagers can adapt to information and a new culture to widen their educational horizons.
Secondly
, these programmes can provide a wide range of exposure to teenagers,
as a result
,
students
 can come to know various
students
 from different backgrounds and share their knowledge and cultures with each other.
Furthermore
, from the perspective of government, nations can buildup positive relationships through these programmes. In conclusion,
although
 many schools in foreign countries introduce a school visiting
programme
, it is only limited to the rich and immature young people's decisions can not be counted in
such
 an important matter.
However
, children's educational horizons are of overriding importance for modern global society as well as for nations.
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