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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Every year, more and more young individuals migrate from rural areas to metropolises, leaving only the elderly behind. I would argue that the loss of the young population from the rural landscape has problematic consequences. In the upcoming paragraphs,
this
 essay will put forth the negative consequences that
such
 a move has not only on the local regional economies but
also
 on the quality of life of overcrowded cities.
First
 of all, the migration stream of young generations to cities, increases the lack of an agricultural workforce, which requires strength and stamina, qualities difficult to find in seniors.
Moreover
, the birth rates in the agricultural areas are negatively impacted by the decrease in the number of young families, which fuels the rural labour force reduction, both negatively affecting regional economies.
For instance
, there are several isolated rural towns in Spain and Italy, whose councils are offering houses for as cheap as one euro, with the aim of attracting young families to settle down, with no other intention more than boosting the local economy as well as avoiding the town’s disappearance. To continue, cities and the living condition of their inhabitants, are negatively affected by these migratory movements.
First
, newcomers to the city feed the flow that makes urban areas increasingly overcrowded.
Second
,
this
 overpopulation increases the difficulties in finding job opportunities as well as rental prices, difficulties that are detrimental to the population in general. A recent study, carried out by the University of Sydney, shows that 30% of the young population from regional towns has moved to large metropolises during the
last
 five years and that the price of rents in urbs has seen an increase of 25% during the same period of time. In conclusion, we can confirm that these migratory flows from the countryside to metropolises generate endless negative effects on the regional economies of rural towns, as well as on the life quality of newcomers to the big urbs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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