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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children’s who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults

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There are two types of approaches regarding the upbringing of the younger ones. With
this
 in mind, some consider being competitive better than being cooperative and vice versa. According to my point of
view
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 both have their own pros and cons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
life
 is a race and in
this
world
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 only the person who is
better
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 performer than others will win.
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 Howard University
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 stated that people working in the
rivalry
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 ecosystem perform better than
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one
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 working alone and
also
 create
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 sense of
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self- achievement
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 and
fulfillment
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.
For instance
, competitions are conducted in every field of
life
 just to create a competitive atmosphere
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 to yield the best out of a person’s brain. Needless to say,
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 of competition should be created from the early stage of
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life
 to push their goals and explore
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healthier opportunities in
life
. On the other side, no one can win only by competing with others all the time, sometimes in some
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 being cooperative is necessary,
for example
, a survey in Norway suggested that people working in helpful environments gave higher output.
Moreover
,
kids
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 group studying often come up with better ideas and reasoning.
Furthermore
, society
flourish
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 more when everyone is ready to help
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other
instead
 of bringing them down. To conclude, both
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views are correct.
However
, there should be
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 between them to let
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society and
children’s
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grow
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 in a good way.
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