Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some People believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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has become increasingly aggressive and violent. The point of view of one group of

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to it has negative psychological impacts on individuals ‘

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and their feelings; it can enable

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to feel stress, anxiety and other feelings that make individuals in a bad mood. While their real life is free from any stress or aggressiveness.

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society

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will not negatively affect their characters. Apparently, they believe that these films and computer games are for just entertainment because they are exciting and amusing,

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. For these reasons, it is recommended to be banned to keep the world safe.

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Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some People believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

It is important for everyone including young people, to save money for their future. What extant do you agree or disagree with tihs statement?

Produced of Cotton between 2004 and 2018 in the leading nations

students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. what are the reasons and solutions for this issue?

It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gaied from books. In your opinion, which source is more important and why?