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Children should always follow their parents' advice. To what extend do you agree?

#children #parents #advice
In
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From
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 my perspective I assume there're many reasons for
children
 to obey their
parents
'
advice
.
However
,
children
 shouldn't adopt all the
advice
 without
hesitate
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hesitation
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 On the one hand
parents
 have more experience compared to their kids since they had faced and dealt with many problems.
Therefore
,
parents
'
advice
 may help
children
 avoid mistakes.
On the other
hand
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children
 might become dependent on their
parents
. They can't develop
their
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the
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 life skill which
are
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is
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 necessary for them to live on their own. Yet,
parents's
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advice
 is quality, but sometimes
parents
 may
too
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be too
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 confident and think their opinion of
somethings
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some things
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 is always accurate
for instance
: My mother used to force me to come to "Literature Training" class because she think
it's
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it was
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 the best for me even though she knows how much
i
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 hate it.
Although
parents
 always
wants
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 the best for their child, they may be self-confident sometimes, even overreact when their
children
 don't do as they say.
In
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At
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 younger age,
children
 need their
parents
'
advice
 to solve problems,but when they grow up, doing things on their own is the best for them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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